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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

I think that this was an interesting look at Rose and Scorpius' relationship and I enjoyed watching the progression of their relationship through the years.

I think that you did a good job of making sure that the scenes flowed from one to the next well and the small italics showing the years were great in helping to keep track of their ages. However, I was a little confused when one scene ended in Rose kissing Scorpius and the next started two years later with intense dislike on Rose's part. Though you explained it a little later on in the scene (kissing her and then running away), I think that it would be nice to have a little more explanation about what happened after their first kiss- perhaps a scene of their sixth year, with Scorpius watching Rose from afar?

I liked how you focused your description on Rose's hair and eyes because it allowed the reader to see the evolution of his feelings for her as his observations about her eyes and hair changed. Though there wasn't too much description of settings such as the classroom and the hallway where their fight occured, it wasn't difficult to come up with my own visualization. However, I would suggest including a few small references to the location of the scene, such as "the corridor was dark" or "Rose's hair contrasted nicely with the grey stones of the wall", something that you did very well with the setting out by the lake.

I also liked your characterization. Scorpius' voice really came through in his narration and he was likable, a typical teenage boy who liked to tease girls. I liked how you made his character almost childish and quite funny with his little comments during the conversations. Rose herself was good- I could definitely see hints of her parents in her, with her studying and constantly answering questions in class. The "know-it-all"- a next generation Hermione!

I did notice a few small grammatical errors/typos that can be easily fixed. With the phrase "shant be smart" I'm unsure if "shant" is the right word... Would "couldn't" be a suitable replacement? As well, with "red head beauty" it should be "red-headed". Finally, I noticed that you flipped between past and present tense in your writing. I would chose one and stick to it- in my opinion, this story works very well in present tense.

All in all, I think that this is a very good one-shot and a very enjoyable read. Your characters are fun and interesting to read about. Thanks for requesting and I hope my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I will defenintly work on the description of the Halway and such. This is my first time doing lots of description like that, and had a lot of fun with it! As to the gramatical errors, yeah, that could use some work :) Thank you for your solid advice, I really appreciate it. :)

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