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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
Hey! Fellow Gryffie here, I want to give you a big thank you for all the work you did during December for Secret Santa. Thank you so much for all the hard work!

This was short and I actually don't normally read such short chapters. I always find that I want more (how selfish of me! how demanding!) because they tend to end at a point where plenty more can be said and should be said. You, however, were able to fit everything in such a small word count that didn't leave me begging for more.

Actually, since I'm such a wimp I was a bit scared while reading this and I shuddered when she shuddered and I even covered my eyes at one point (which was pointless because then how am I going to read the words?).

This was terrifying. I could hear the screams in my head, I actually had to read through this twice because the first time I started to get a bit scared and started scanning the words. The second time I read through it was much better. I guess because I knew what to expect.

It's interesting to see that you got this entire idea with just writing down 'unidentified female Death Eater. Unidentified female victim,' because it was really that powerful. I imagined Bellatrix momentarilly because the way you use 'The Dark Witch,' that kind of seems, to me, Bella's characterization. However, once I read it over and I realized that the witch couldn't be Bellatrix. She was far too...well, she seemed to nice (which makes no sense, I know). At first she seemed very powerful to me, strong and fearful but by the end, when she's smiling and then she disappears it seems to be that she wouldn't really last as a Death Eater. I'm thinking beyond this one-shot now.

The victim was a second thought to me as I read this over. I know she's supposed to be a main point but I was more focused on what was happening to her than her as an actual person. I think it's because of the words you used, 'empty, hollow' you made it so that she doesn't seem like she's really there which I think is great because she really becomes this shell of herself, she's defeated. We don't know it before hand she's a strong woman, we don't know the background to her life and her skill. We just know she's defeated and this is her end so is she really all that important? Well, we'll never know.

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for this review! :D

I'm glad you liked it, and I agree with what you said about longer chapters. I am always left wanting more, but never seem to pull it off very well. Never mind! I'm glad you thought the word count got everything included though! :)

Haha, maybe covering your eyes wasn't the best idea in the world, as it did hinder your ability to read on- just slightly.

I honestly don't know how I ended up with that. Probably hours of nit-picking whilst I wrote, and stuff like that. It took me ages to finally have this ready to upload.

That's really interesting, what you said about the character of the Death Eater. Everybody sees her as Bellatrix, but I totally get what you mean about the other side to her. I think it's great that you've thought about it like that, because now I can look back and see exactly how I wrote that.

The victim was a bit of a second-thought as I wrote it too. I guess by not adding any character to her, she is by default kind-of innocent, which just makes this even more brutal. But no, there really is nothing about her past or character in this, so I guess it's right to focus on the actions.

You'll never know. Well, I am thinking of writing a couple of stories similar to this for the Imperius and Cruciatus curses. So maybe I'll end up giving you a bit more information, provided I use the same template characters.

Thanks for such a great review! and the Secret Santa was my pleasure, honestly. I'm glad you enjoyed it (I hope you did, but judging by this, I think you did. Hopefully.). :)

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