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Review:charlottetrips says:
Char here with your requested review! I truly loved the other stories Iíve read of yours, so Iím coming to this story with anticipation! Iím sure you wonít disappoint!

Iím wondering where weíll be going with your story being titled ďFried EggsĒ.

My first impressions of Marianna are that sheís studious and loves being able to be the know-it-all but sheís not finding it so easy as, letís say, Hermione would. That transition from being two peas in a pod to suddenly being the third wheel is aptly described here, though you donít necessarily say it. Youíre just describing the feeling and Iím totally getting it! I, unfortunately am of Mariannaís best friend type, having gotten married before my best friend but she bears it up pretty well.

Iím loving the inner monologue of Marianna and the problems sheís having in trying to get the perfect research done for her essay and just about anything youíve described for her. She is so Ravenclaw and Iím interested to hear how her character will develop (if youíve got those plans in mind).

Oh, eggs on a bookÖrightÖI guess I can see where this is going.

Not really.

So I guess Iím going to have to read your new chapter when it comes out, eh? Not a hardship for me because Iím really enjoying your writing. Not all stories have to start out with explosive action and usually the better ones are the stories that take time to introduce a character first.

Youíre doing quite well on the description. Youíre not spending too much time on the nitty gritty (i.e. the walls were stone with hints of red as she walked at a quarter-time towards the Great Hall, a walk that would take 2.4 minutes) but enough that I know what sheís doing but more to the point, what time of person Marianna is. As Iíve mentioned above, youíve given a distinct impression of her character thatís just a bit uptight and Iím hoping youíre going to develop her into something a little more.

Look me up for another review when Chapter 2 is out! (Or I may just have enough time to stop by and check it out.)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing- I'm so glad that you enjoy my work.

Haha- you've described Marianna perfectly! Poor Marianna isn't exactly handling her best friend's departure well... It's great to hear that her feelings are coming across nicely!

I had a lot of fun writing Marianna- she is the typical Ravenclaw, so concerned with her studies that it's funny for anyone listening to her. I'm a little bit like her in terms of schoolwork (though not as extreme) and so it was remarkably easy to write her feelings.

I'll definitely request again for chapter 2- I really enjoy reading your reviews! Thanks once again!


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