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Review:TenthWeasley says:
So, I totally should have swung by here before now. I had every intention of doing so two nights ago, but my sister hosted a surprise party at our house for a friend of ours, and the computer was necessarily evacuated. And yesterday was spent in a frenzy of English homework and writing, and by the time I remembered I /still/ hadn't read this I think it was one in the morning. So, as always, this review begins with an apology!

I think you're right about this chapter -- it's short, yes, but I think too much more information would have made it seem stretched and forced. And sometimes short chapters are just necessary! I think it's because you switch points of view every chapter, too -- I have a few chapters where the viewpoint switches midway, and if I hadn't done that, I'd have plenty of these.

I /loved/ how you're focusing so much on Snape's emotions regarding the team and Malfoy and the brooms, because, as a strong proponent of everything that is good and just in him (♥), I think it's so important to explain away things like that, that naysayers might use as a case against him. And yes, that doesn't make a terrible lot of sense, but I am just filled with appreciation at how you write him and you just /understand/ him.

Also, he is totally falling in love. I'm calling it now and it is wonderful. :D Snape, you cannot question your feelings! Just go with them! (And while we're on the subject, I'm having you design my next bedroom, because after seeing how you've described Avrille's and Snape's I name you a viable candidate for the position.)

Anyway. Loved this chapter -- of course -- and I am so excited for the next one -- of course -- and I am so pleased I started reading this! Onward! :)

Author's Response: As always, no worries! I was only just able to get on HPFF since I've been dealing with a sick baby and getting violently sick myself in the midst of a temporary move. Fun fun times. A surprise party sounds awesome, though.

Do you ever reread something you've written and simply don't remember writing it, but you're really impressed with it? There were a couple paragraphs in this chapter (Severus being all analytical about love) that I really don't remember writing. So it's always fun to read parts like that again since I don't have it memorized like most of the story :D I do remember why I added it since I felt like he was falling in love much too quickly. Granted he *might* have feelings like that happen all of a sudden, but he certainly wouldn't admit it to himself if he did.

Ah, to live at Hogwarts and have an amazing bedroom plus the magical powers to design it however you want. I totally want to live in Severus' room. Avrille's is ok, but always kind of retained that feeling of a guest bedroom to me. Severus' feels more like a home.

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