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Review:academica says:
Hey! Thanks for the swap :)

I really like the detail in this. The intricacy in your explanations makes it easy to see just how bad of a day Marianna is having and why she has so much room to complain. It does a good job of creating sympathy for your OC right off the bat, which is not the easiest thing in the world to do. Well done!

Poor Marianna is really having a bad day. I love the way you created so much sympathy for her and then turned it right on its head by revealing her snappy, overly serious nature. Her thoughts were pretty amusing, especially when she was dealing with the Hufflepuff whose eggs ruined her book.

This is a very interesting start to a story, and I'll be looking forward to see where you take it from here. The flow is great and I like how you've taken time to walk us through each moment of Marianna's rough day. I'll be interested to see where Tonks comes in and if things ever begin to look up for poor Marianna. Your imagery is very good, especially your description of the spread of food - I just ate dinner, and I'm already hungry for breakfast after reading this! :) I didn't notice any mistakes, either, which is always refreshing.

Excellent! I'll probably be back for chapter two. Thanks again!

Amanda

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm so glad that you liked the detail- I really was trying to make Marianna a character in her own right instead of just a flat original character.

Marianna was quite fun to write- she's so serious about her studies and doesn't like anything to get in her way regarding them. Her speech, which appears in full in the next chapter, was one of my favourite things to write for this story.

I'm glad that you liked the flow and the level of description in this story- Tonks is featured in the next chapter. The next chapter is already in the queue if you're interested. :)

Thanks once again for the review! I really appreciate it.


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