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Review:Roots in Water says:
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This is a very intriguing and interesting first chapter, one that I quite enjoyed reading.

I found the spare way of running through her life very interesting and fitting because it resembled her own life- she doesn't have much of anything. It really fit with the age of Jayde as well as her attitude- she seems almost detached from everything.

Corey wasn't very nice in this chapter (understatement, I know), but the whole scene involving him was realistic. Little kids do act like that and I can imagine Corey becoming frustrated with her because of her "un-coolness". It's quite sad that kids act that way and I wish that at least someone in the crowd had stood up for her... All those people just watching her being kicked was cruel.

I'm interested to see what exactly being a Nimbimagus means. It seems to be linked to the weather... I enjoyed the subtle ways in which you've hinted at her powers in this chapter. The darkening sky as she was getting beat up, the rain falling as she struggled through her hurt... The weather is linked to her emotions.

All in all, I quite enjoyed this chapter and I think that it sets you up well for the rest of the story. It'll be interesting to see how she goes to Hogwarts, as her powers don't seem to be the typical witch's.

Author's Response: Wow. Thank you SO much for your review; I can tell you've put a lot of thought into this and I can't tell you how greatly I appreciate it.

It makes me feel wonderful for you to say that the attitudes of Jayde and Corey, as well as the other children, were believable and realistic. It's been a while since I've been that age and I really hoped to be able to put my reader into that mindset again... it's nice to hear it paid off.

Yes, her being a Nimbimagus does indeed have something to do with the weather, as I've tried to indicate in this chapter... I'm glad you picked up on the hints I gave with the differing weather throughout the day.

I'm really very glad that you enjoyed this chapter, and as I said above, I really appreciate your thoughtfulness when writing this review. Thank you SO much!


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