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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

I really enjoyed reading this story- I think that it was thoughtful and gave good insight into the miserable life of Severus Snape. Am I right in thinking that Snape hadn't yet gone to Hogwarts in this story? From the description of the Evans family in this story it seemed like the rift hadn't yet appeared between Lily and Petunia.

I liked your use of description to give the readers a picture of Snape's awful life at home. His poor clothing and lack of Christmas gifts coupled with the arguing between his parents really helped to create a loveless atmosphere in his house, which you contrasted nicely with the loving atmosphere at the Evans house. Snape's hope for better, happier Christmases in the future was especially touching because to the best of our knowledge he never gets one.

The plot of this story was well put-together. As I mentioned before, the beginning of this story helped to ground Snape's character and his feelings at that point in the year and his journey out into the world of happier households allowed Snape the chance to reflect on his feelings and give the story a sense of forward momentum. The ending worked well with the rest of the story to give it a sense of completness, because it was hopeful and further explored the feelings that Snape had expressed at the beginning of the chapter. The plot itself didn't feel rushed and I enjoyed reading about Snape's hopes for the future. I did find it a little strange, though, that his parents were able to fight for almost a whole day in the same room- wouldn't at least one of them gotten too angry at some point and stormed out of the kitchen, possibly discovering Snape's absence along the way (though they might have been too angry to notice)?

As for the flow of this story, your paragraphs moved smoothly from one to the next but I did notice that sometimes you would use the same description/verb twice in one sentence and it made those sentences a little awkward to read. For instance, you used "faint" twice in one sentence in the first paragraph to describe the sun- even just the use of a synonym for "faint" would help the sentence to sound less repetitive.

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this story and it definitely sounded true to canon! Thanks for requesting and I hope that my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: Hi! WOW, thanks so much for this wonderful review! I'm really glad that you liked it and your comments were very helpful ^_^

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