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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there, it's me again. :] I saw that you responded to one of my reviews. It's good to know that you ARE seeing them. I hope you had a good vacation.

Now, review time? I think so.

Characterization: ah, my favorite. ;] I absolutely adored that this was from Sirius' point of view. You wrote him well and I liked the inner view we got of his thoughts. Well done. There weren't many other characters that played a large part in this chapter, but the ones who appeared were fine.

Interactions: well, here we get a little more interesting. The Marauders all mesh well, which is good. I like the description that Sirius gives of Remus being the dorm warden. I always thought he was something like that. There was a completely cliche interaction between Lily and James where she yelled at him for asking her out. So...cliche, yes. And Sirius makes a cliche comment about her "temper being as fiery as her hair" or something. CRINGE. But there was a funny line in reference to James: "so I threw my pillow at James to wake him up, might as well have thrown a book for all the good it did." I definitely laughed. :D And...Sirius' awkwardness with his exes was great. And his jealousy of Caprice's interest in Jason! Awesome.

Believability: pretty good here. I'm not a guy, so I don't know how they think, but it seemed reasonable, the way you wrote for Sirius. I didn't mind it. :]

Flow and pace: both are going well. I can't really complain here either.

We're a little lacking in descriptions still, but some things you described well, like the party atmosphere. We'll see how this enhances or flops in the following chapters. I'll keep you posted.

I'm very interested to see where things go since Sirius pretty much just admitted to himself that he has feelings for Caprice. We'll see! :]

On to chapter nine ASAP.

Author's Response: Hey again! More reviews! YAY!

Ok so I'm thrilled you enjoyed the Sirius POV wasn't quite sure it crossed over well until people said it was good enough :) so thanks again.

Yes! very cliche but hell I like the occationa cliche line thrown into the midst. It's just all good entertainment.

Glad you liked Remus too! Thank you so so much for coming by and reviewing this chapter! I really really appreciate it! Thanks loads!


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