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Review:academica says:
Hey! Here from review tag :)

This is definitely an interesting start to a story. I thought your portrayal of an orphan was pretty accurate, as far as I know, and I like the twist that Jayde's mortal enemy was another orphan. You would think that he would suffer her fate as well, since he probably wore tattered hand-me-downs too, but you can see a clear and important difference in their personalities.

I liked all the detail in this chapter, and I like the style in which you've written it. I also like that you tried to end on a bit of a cliffhanger, even though it concluded a bit too abruptly for my taste. I think it would have been nice to include the whole incident and then end right in the middle of the aftermath, but that's just a personal preference. All in all, it was a very interesting way for Jayde to discover her "uniqueness" :)

Nice start!

academica

Author's Response: Hey there! First off, thank you SO much for taking the time to read and review this for me! I'm glad you find the portrayal of the orphan to be accurate. I'm not writing that from experience, so I was hoping to convey it as accurately as possible. And I agree, you'd think Corey would be in the same boat as Jayde. I'm glad you see the huge differences between their personalities. :-)

I am thrilled to hear that you liked all the detail, detail/description is one of the things I worry about most in my writing. I really appreciate your commenting about the cliffhanger, even though you'd have preferred for it not to end at this moment.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, dear! Thanks again for reading and reviewing!


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