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Review:CambAngst says:
So one thing confused me a bit from the get-go. What, exactly, was the "deal" that McGonagall was proposing to Draco and Hermione? It seemed as though all she did was ask them to help protect the younger students from the Carrows. I'm hoping that I didn't miss something important.

Moving along, I liked Neville's conversation with Hermione. I did lost track of who was speaking at one point in the conversation, so you might want to sprinkle in another couple of dialog tags, but the dialog itself was convincing and moving. Hogwarts is going to be a dark, troubled place.

I would have liked to see you go into more detail about what happened in Alecto Carrow's muggle studies class. It's obviously a very dark, unpleasant situation, and I think you could have added something distinct to your story by spending some time on it.

Five chapters in and I have to say I'm enjoying myself. Let's see where this goes next.

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