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Review:Woodrow Rynne says:
This was a really good start! :) I really enjoyed it. There were no spelling/grammar errors to speak of, and I adore next-gen anyway, so, yeah...

NOT CONTINUE? Are you kidding? Of course, you should. This is a really nice premise, and this story had a fluffy kind of feel that I loved. Yes, the best friend falling in love is a bit over-used, but that doesn't matter, as long as give it your own twist ;)

As for criticism, I would say, rewrite the first few paragraphs (in my opinion), because the narrative comes out a bit redundant. As a rule of thumb, don't just tell everything about the main character in the beginning of the fic. Show us, rather than telling. It would hook more readers to your story. :) You could add in more dialogue or something to keep it more interesting in the beginning itself. The 'have you loved' thing was fine and good, but I admit I got a little tired when she started explaining her job. You don't really need to explain her relationship with James either, because you can show us later through dialogues and body-language when she meets him. :)

I hope you understood that, I wasn't very coherent. :P Anyway, I hope I was helpful, because this fic has the potential to be really great as you progress, and I would love to read more and see where it's going! :)
~vanya

Author's Response: Yey, thank you so much for your review!

I agree, there is a LOT of explaining in the first chapter, but that changes already in the next one! I just wanted to fit so much into the first one and the text came so easilly I decided to leave it like that.

And critisism is always welcome and yours was really helpful! One really can't get better without other people pointing out what one could do better. That's the reason why I decided to finally post one of my stories here (:

The second chap is already on the queue so it shouldn't be long when it comes out!


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