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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello! Me again. Are you seeing these reviews? :[ I hope so! Let me know. :]

Anyhow, moving on to your concerns--first up, characterization: well, I definitely don't mind anybody in particular. I don't see any Mary-Sues, so that's a plus! :D I think Capri is a good character, though I'm very surprised she got over her heartbreak so quickly! And I'm also sort of shocked that Sirius was having sex (mentioned last chapter) and he's only fifteen. :o Scandalous!

Interactions: quite nice. I do like that Capri didn't mope forever. And I love how kind her friends are about her situation. So sweet. And I'm very excited about this Jason fellow! We'll see where he goes. Wink wink. :]

Believability: you're fine here. Nothing was out of place in this chapter except maybe how quickly she got over how upset she was last chapter.

Flow and pace: are going fine. :] It's smooth and steady and not going wacko. I like it quite a bit.

Word choice: I don't see anything that's odd, so nothing to comment on here.

Overall, I think you're doing great still. I liked this chapter, though it seemed a littly sporadic in relation to the last chapter where she was so upset. She just...got over it in this chapter and that seemed a little rushed. But maybe it's all just a show. We'll see. :]

Keep up the good work! I'll read chapter eight ASAP!

--Emily
he had joined the team when James was in first year

Author's Response: Hey!
Ohh I love your reviews!!! Shoot me for not replying sooner! So sorry I'm just all over the place these days! busy busy! Anyways!

Thank you thank you for reviewing! Yay! no Mary-Sues! I fear it like the plague lol so thank you for the reassurance! Haha yes scandalous indeed, just how I like my Sirius!

Thanks loads again!


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