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Review:kaileena_sands says:
Hi there! Coming here from the Ravenclaw review battle.

Firstly, I must admit I've been wanting to read this story ever since Susan did that wonderful banner of yours. I also love the title you've chosen from the Yeat's poem - I think it fits your story beautifully (though for now, I've not come to the point of the "drifts away" part, but I am sure we'll get to that in the next chapters).

Anyway, now to a bit more un-rambly review (I cannot seem to get the hang of those xD). I think you have a great way of expressing yourself, and the language you use is very fitting - it's very well-written without being too heavy on description or using pompous words just for the sake of being them there. Indeed, I read the whole chapter in one breathe. Smooth!

Your characterization is even better if possible! I especially loved how you described Peter, he's usually left so... flat(?!) in fanfiction. But here, we just see the insecure boy, who's disappointed that life dealt him a short hand again (with being a rat Animagus and all). He can not find worth in himself, so he can only get it from external sources - his friends (and idols) James and Sirius.

The glimpses into Remus' character were also great! I find it very logical that he would suspect his friends were up to something, after all by all accounts he was quiet smart and should have noticed something was off. But he, too, having such low self-esteem immediately thinks his friends are up to something.

So, I really liked this story - it's got everything you could wish for from a fanfic - it's well-written, intriguing and stays true to the spirit of the books. I will definitely read the next chapters, though I am afraid, I am smelling a tear-inducing and grim ending.

Thanks for writing such a great piece! :)

Author's Response: Heh, Susan's banner is definitely well-known, I think. She's fantastic. Yeats has been a HUGE inspiration for me in a lot of my fics, and his words just fit perfectly. You will definitely see the whole "drifts away" part in the last chapter.

Thank you for the compliments on my writing. I've been writing for a while so I guess I sort of fall into a rhythm while I'm writing. I'm glad it works well for you. :)

Peter is definitely a difficult character to portray in fanfiction, and one that many authors choose to ignore. I adore all the Marauders so I could never do that. Peter has always been a complex character that I try to write as rounded as possible - because no one likes a flat character. James and Sirius are great friends to encourage him and prove his worth.

It's sad that Remus would assume that, but true. He's dealt with a lot in his young years with being a werewolf and struggling to fight against being a monster, so having them avoid him is like his biggest fear. Good thing that's not the case. ;)

I'm really happy you're enjoying it. Yes, the ending is rather sad but we all know it's coming so hopefully it will prepare you well.

Thank you for leaving me such a wonderful, thoughtful review. :)


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