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Review:MercyWaters says:
That was a really sweet story. It was sad and touching, but at the same time a bit happy with the ending. I'm glad that Neville came to terms with things rather than continuing on all heartbroken.

I enjoy the characterization of Neville, I was always a bit disappointed with the lack of insight we get into his character in the series, so I'm glad with how you portrayed him. It seemed accurate and was really well-written. :) The storyline was good, though I do think it could've been elaborated on a bit more. You skip through scenes very fast, I think some of those scene breaks could be combined and you should lengthen a lot of them with more description. I also think that you could've included Luna MUCH more in this piece. There doesn't seem to be much attention on her, just how Neville feels about her.

Thanks for requesting a review! :)

-Mercy

Author's Response: Thank you for this! It's been very helpful.
In an interview somewhere Neville described Luna & his relationship as a summer fling so I tried to get that across. I try to write my stories more realistically, whether they be from a boy or girls POV because I'm sick of reading stories where they get all heartbroken.

Same! Neville was brilliant in the books but he never got enough credit. Thank you!


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