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Review:Snapdragons says:
Nothing like a good old Marauders story! :) I like what you've started here - I found myself laughing multiple times during this chapter! Stuff like meditating "to consider intelligent questions like 'what is the point of living' and 'why do I fancy James Potter so much.'" ha.

I feel like you've got a good start at showing us Marlene's character. I loved seeing her interact with the little girl at the beginning of the chapter - I think that showed us a side of her that we really didn't see in the rest of this. She's definitely funny and upbeat but I'm curious to know more about her. I'm confident that her character will be explored more in later chapters though! :)

One suggestion I would have is to use asterisks or something in between scene changes - I just think it would help it flow more.

Overall, I think you did a really nice job with this first chapter and with introducing everyone! It sounds interesting, and I hope I get to read more! :)

Author's Response: Hiya! Thanks for a very sweet review! Glad it made you laugh x).
Oh, the asteriks, how they haunt me! Nearly every review on here as suggested I put them in, so I'm definitely going to find time to do so!
Thanks so much,
LWG x

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