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Review:MinnaMy says:
Really good story and well written!

Though Nate/Naomi seems a little... I don't know. But the whole part when she freaked out over her friends drinking, just seems odd. Sure I've never actually partied that much when I was their age I still think most teenagers drink a little, even if only to taste. She almost seems a little stuck-up at times, but only sometimes.
It would probably be good to read a bit about her past, since you wrote that she didn't really have that many friends and that people were usually talking about her rather than with her. In that way it could be easier to understand her, though you have done a pretty good job att doing that already but background information about people is still good. :)

Otherwise it's really good and I almost laughet my pants of in the chapter when Remus walked into the bathroom while Nat/Naomi was in there.

I'm also wondering who it was that fixed the wand... My money is on Sirius since he's a very good wizard and he acts like he really care for Nate, even though he doesn't know that much about "him".

Another thing I really wish to know: Does Sirius remember the kiss? It was so cute when he thought that at least Nate looked happier after the kiss. I actually made an "aaaw"-sound at that. :3

And I know this is a really long review but since I just found and read through all 10 chapters without reviewing I should make up for it in this review. :D Hope you don't mind. ;)

With love,
MinnaMy

Author's Response: Yeah, i suppose she does seem like that, but once i do get to her past (which i am planning to but it's going to be put in the correct part) I think you'll understand why.
The wand thing will also come back later so no spoilers!!!
Sirius, well, i don't want to give spoilers so.
But thanks for the long review!! I love long reviews, they make my day!!!
I'll update soon!!!


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