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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello again!

Another good chapter! Though I do have more constructive criticism about this one than the last...let's get started, shall we?

Well, I like the characterization again. I love that there was sort of a double-standard with Hiba and Ali according to their mother. Hiba was reprimanded, but Ali was allowed to do what he wanted. That's very culturally accurate, even if you didn't mean for it to be.

Hiba was consistent again, as was her brother. I can totally relate to her on how annoying little siblings can be. The parents were good as well. Jill seems like a great foil to Hiba--hyper and dramatic instead of quiet and reserved. Good job. And it's very Remus-like to help someone in need. How sweet. :] Though it's a total cliche that he just has this obsession with the healing qualities of chocolate...

The premise of this story is a little bit farfetched. If someone DID leave Hogwarts, I don't think that Dumbledore would worry too much about replacing them as a prefect. And in the last chapter you said that the girl who left was a Hufflepuff, but Hiba is a Ravenclaw who is replacing her. Um...what? Wouldn't another Hufflepuff get the position?

Continuing: things seem pretty solid. Hiba knows that people notice her headscarf, though I never knew that Hogwarts was so prejudiced! Most people wouldn't really care...but I guess this WAS set in Marauders-Era, maybe it was more dramatic then.

Overall, another good chapter. I'll read the third ASAP! Good job!

--Emily

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review again!

I'm glad you liked the characterization again, and the fact that you find Jill as a foil to Hiba in someways, it was intended that they would be different, but at the same time have some similarities.

As for Dumbledore, yes you are right that Dumbledore wouldn't be 'that' worried about replacing a prefect, but he wasn't worried about that. He was just remembering that he wanted Hiba to do that position so he might "change" her a bit and give her more confidence. But I would have to check that part again in case I made him seem too worried, thanks for letting me know! As for the Hufflepuff and Ravenclaw thing, yes I have noticed my mistake! I will be editing that soon hopefully, Hiba is supposed to be a Hufflepuff, and so is Jill.

As for people noticing her head-scarf, it is something new for them, because it's the first time they've seen a student in Hogwarts wearing one before, so they all kind of notice it (but as I said in one of the chapters I think, only the new and younger students stare, the older students kind of got over it).

All in all, thanks for the review and feedback!


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