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Review:javct says:
Javct45 here with your review!

I really enjoyed this. It's always nice to read a fluffy James/Lily.
I found the dialogue really good. I couldn't find anything awkward and you kept the dialogue very in character to the person speaking.

The characterisation, as I mentioned above, was really good. Nothing screamed OOC. Everyone has their own take on Lily; some more realistic than others, and I think that yours is one of the best one's that i've read :D

Grammar. I did, however, pick up two mistakes at the start of the story. When you write dialogue and end it with a full stop, '?' or a '!' the word after would be a capital. For example, it wouldn't be this: 'LAUGHING?" the figure' it would actually be 'LAUGHING?" The figure'

I found the flow and pace of the story very good as well. You cut the scenes at just the right time :)
*Jaz,
9/10

Author's Response: Oo, thanks for that. I must have missed those typos. Cheers!

Again, thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you liked it. Hearing that I got their characterisation right, and that they weren't OOC is fantastic. I'm actually so thrilled you liked Lily! You have no idea, haha.

Short and fluffy obviously, but hearing positive feedback is so encouraging.

Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts, it means a lot :)

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