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Review:Pixileanin says:
Here are my favorite parts:

"He observed the white flakes as they began to pile up gradually on the ground, covering up the dirty pavement and dingy abandoned buildings with a fresh coat of white, washing them clean of their former ugliness."

"But for now, she could enjoy this moment, and she could enjoy him. She intended to be present for it."

I also enjoyed how you described the kitchen appliances by their outward appearances, and didn't name them, as if we were seeing them through Sirius' eyes. That was very effective to bring home the point that he wasn't familiar with these things. Great job there.

Sirius has definitely given Lucy a lot to think about: the people and things she's left behind since she's separated herself from the Wizarding community. I can see why she must be second guessing herself in a big way. I feel the indecision. Lovely.

Author's Response: Thanks! I also liked those parts, and it was kind of fun to imagine how a pureblood wizard would view common Muggle appliances. It seems like that particular creative choice worked to effectively put the reader in Sirius's shoes, which is exactly what I wanted. Wonderful!

I try to push the emotion through whenever I can, especially in this story, where much of the action takes place in characters' minds. It's lovely to hear that it's working for you.

Thanks for another kind review! :)


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