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Review:AC_rules says:
Hey there, it's Acrules stopping by from the forums with your review.

I've got to say that I was a little dubious about this, but it was actually really nice :) I'd never really thought about what Wood's parents might be doing in the war (or what Wood might be doing at all, really) but I really liked the depiction of a couple with a baby who are really scared. But, I think you could have fleshed out the description of things at the beginning. There was no real description throughout the whole thing, appart from the mention of the stars... and although some people have more descriptive styles than others I think I wanted a LITTLE more. For a start, if it was London - why did it seem so empty? Were there supposed to be other people about, and if they weren't - why? London is pretty busy whenever the time of day, I can see that you've set this at night - but how late is it for it to be quite? Just give me a bit more. You're writing is good, so I definately want a little bit MORE of it, you know?

I liked that the father, Charles, was really unsure about having a son. I thought you captured the whole awkward-first-time-father who doesn't know what to do, especially combined with the effect of the war pushing down on them. That was really good.

Couple of mistakes too:

Charles had to keep them away form harm but where could he go? (should be from harm and personally, I think there shoud be a commar between 'harm' and 'but' although I have been wrong about these sorts of things before).

Also, this sentence threw me a little, but I think it just needs a commar -"She stared(,) panicked at his sudden excitement."

Anyway, after that lovely first section the transition into the second part of felt quite jarring to me. I think you lost some of your poetic style at that point (which I really enjoyed, by the way, it had an almost lullaby-esque feel to it - which is always fun in prologues). And, I dunno, although I truly and honestly love little Oliver's first fly I just didn't warm to that section as much as I thought I would. Don't get me wrong, I still enjoyed it a lot - just not as much as the first part.

This was a lovely prologue and it really was a pleasure to read. Feel free to re-request if you think my review's been at all helpful :)

-AC

Author's Response: Hello! Sorry for my late response.

Thank you for your review, I suppose London would be late but at anytime of day... Oliver's parents weren't involved in the war itself but I do think it would have affected. I take note to correct my errors (thank you for pointing the out)

Really it felt lullaby-esque *blush* Thank you I mean I wrote this such a long time ago I suppose I could write the second part to sort of match the top since it'd flow better that way .

Thank you again


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