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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Ah, everything is getting so intense! I really do love the switching back and forth to different locations. Like I said in the prologue, it works well with this fic. You keep us intrigued by having us view the story from two different sides of the story - with the Next Gen kids getting it second hand from the Prophet and then again with Goyle and the group of cloaked figures.

I totally did NOT guess Goyle, by the way! He killed Solovyov? I'm guessing by the lack of concern for Goyle's vomiting and coughing up blood that that circle of people had no idea what that vial would do. I was really surprised when Pansy made an appearance as well. Is Draco involved in this at all, I wonder? If this little group is trying to resurrect something similar to the Death Eaters under Voldemort's rule, maybe? I wonder who the leader is...

I enjoyed the little inclusion of the Next Gen kids too. You've written them very well here, at least Molly, Rose, and Albus. You've given us a bit of their personalities in the little that they're included in this chapter and I can't wait to see them explored fully.

There were a few suggestions I wanted to point out. I hope you don't mind! I would try to read through your chapter because at some points your repetition of 'the man' or 'the cloaked figure' made it a bit hard to follow which character you were talking about. I know it's hard when you're trying not to reveal the identity of your character but it made the flow seem a bit awkward sometimes. For example: The man that had been following the man that had fallen - the repetition of 'the man that had' just seems a bit of a mouthful, I guess. I think your best bet would to stay consistent so rather than saying 'the man that had fallen' you could say 'the cloaked figure' to stay with how you'd been referring to him throughout that section of the story. It's just a suggestion, though, like all of my comments, so you don't necessarily need to pay them any mind. :)

Also, "Its stone floor of the was covered in big dark puddles that splashed dirty water whenever one of the men stepped in them." - 'of the' seems to be unnecessary in this sentence, unless you're missing a word like 'street' or whatnot. And, "Some were gasping, other whispering" - other should be others.

You're definitely keeping this story pretty fast paced and it's all very exciting! I just want to keep reading and reading to find out what's going to happen with all those patients, how this disease will progress and spread, and what role do the Next Gen kids play in it!

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