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Review:CambAngst says:
In my mind, I'm thinking of this chapter as a sort of intermission between the first and second years. Still, there were some useful and interesting things that popped up.

First off, it was great to see the older generation. I thought you did a terrific job of characterizing Ron, Hermione, Harry and Ginny's reactions to the kids going missing for so long. The four of them felt just right, with exactly the right amounts of pique and the right triggers for their anger. Molly also made a good peace-maker to resolve the situation -- and allow the story to continue into second year before everyone wound up grounded.

Now I'm very curious about how Teddy smooths things over with the adults. It seems like he has quite a challenge on his hands. There are certain things inherent in Ron's letters that are going to be touchy subjects for the adults.

I noticed a few little ticky-tack things you might want to take a look at:

"Do you think those last letters told the entire truth or that it was more of an interpretation of Uncle Ron,?" - you need to delete the comma before the question mark.

"Rose responds, loosing whatever control..." - I think you meant "losing".

One last thing, and I almost feel bad bringing it up, but the sentence from Buffy that you worked into Ron's dialog... ugh, not so good.

But overall, this was a wonderful pause in the middle of a great story. I look forward to continuing!

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