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Review:CambAngst says:
Tremendous! The first 8 chapters of this story were brilliant, and this one was simply the icing on the cake. Your retelling of Ron, Hermione and Harry's adventure to save the stone from Voldemort was so well done! Based on your author's note, I was guessing that you wound up having to lift sizable pieces of dialog from the book, but after reading it all the way through I had to use the browser to find the asterisks, so it was barely noticeable.

I've hit on this in a few earlier reviews, but if there's any one thing I can find to critique, it's that your dialog sometimes sounds too formal for kids the age that Al, Lily, Rose and Hugo are supposed to be in this story. It's not a big thing, but every once in a while I'm reading along and it sort of jolts me back to reality and I have to re-engage.

Aside from that, I noticed that all four kids had a somewhat muted reaction to their parents' injuries. Maybe after the earlier scenes they're just getting a little tired, or in Hugo's case hungry, but I think I might have expected Al and Lily to react a little more strongly to seeing their father unconscious in a hospital bed.

Overall, this story has been a tour de force so far, and I'm looking forward to year two. Ginny! Yes, we get to read about Ginny! So excited. I'll say this much, and I don't say it lightly: this story is sneaking up on Delicate on my mental list of favorite Next Gen fics. Well done!

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