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Review:academica says:
Hey! Thanks for the swap :) It was a tough decision, but I decided to go with this one. You seem to love Luna!

This story is such an interesting study in contrasts. You've got Luna, perched like a songbird (fantastic metaphor there) and waiting patiently to be rescued while she admires the night sky, and Mr. Ollivander, the elderly, world-weary man who has already accepted his impending doom.

I also love the character progression you've shown even in this short piece. Mr. Ollivander clearly comes to care for Luna and worry a little bit about her, and Luna shares a little bit of her light with him. I like that you've shown us that the two of them maintained their friendship after their capture was concluded. And Luna's yellow wedding dress... so very her. Great choice!

The ending was very sweet. I would never have imagined the two of them creating quite so special of a bond, even after what they went through, but I like to imagine such a thing. The whole story was rather light and tender, and quite enjoyable.

I did notice one tiny thing -- when Luna says "of course I will, but then again, you already knew that, I think", you're missing the last comma in that sentence (after 'that'). Normally I wouldn't mention such a minute detail, but it did disrupt the flow a bit for me, and I had to go back and read it over again before I understood what you'd intended to say.

Wonderful!

Amanda

Author's Response: I do love Luna!

I thought they were such drastically contrasting characters that they would compliment each other well. Luna is sort of an infectious soul, and I could see her having a very positive impact on Ollivander's life.

Thank you so much for the review!

xoxo
Melissa

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