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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
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You are definetely off to a good start here. I definetely liked the narrative voice you've given Marlene, her attitude is very amusing and helps give life to the story.

I also liked you interpretation of the James/Lily dynamic, it was nice that Lily actually liked him back an wasn't just giving in to his pestering.

I was also really glad you included Peter and gave him unique personality traits, its definetely easy to leave him out of this type of story.

The chapter flowed very well, and there was some very nice Remus/Marlene foreshadowing.

Author's Response: Hi there!
Thanks for the lovely review.
Glad you liked it! I was trying for an original, different touch. I did specifically include Peter, because I also don't like the stereotypical way he is usually displayed. And the lily/James thing is just exactly how I imagine it! I guess that's all we can ever do :)

LWG :)


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