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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! Back for the fourth and final review on your current request!

I know I said that if I had had sisters I would've cried. But I think I'll take that back. Because after reading this, I think ANYbody would shed a tear or two. It's just so heart-wrenching! I know you were about the angst level in this chapter but I'm here to assure you that it's written very well and well.. what else can I say? The sadness I feel courtesy of Andromeda says it all. Excellent job!

The way you made Andromeda go to the grave and then realise that Bellatrix would have hated was just purely amazing. It should how close they actually had been as sisters and how well they had known each other. I especially loved it when she saw that nothing was according to what Bellatrix would have wanted.

The insertion of the memory of their grandfather's funeral did it for me. I sniffed. It was so completely understandable why she would think of such a memory when visiting Bella's grave and I think that it was an important contribution to the level of angst in this chapter. I don't think that it would've had the same impact without the funeral scene. So very good job there! =)

At the end of that memory, I couldn't believe my eyes. I was so surprised to see Bella's sisterly side and I think that writing that was a very good idea! That way Andromeda had more to mourn and it showed to your readers why exactly Andy was crying for Bella- her sister. Really very good job with it!

What else can I say? I was glad to see that you incorporated Ted, Remus and Tonks into her memories and her mourning. I think that that was the best thing to do; her grief transforming from the loss of her sister to the loss of her beloved family. Loved it.

I really like the way you've written your entire story. The imagery and the description level is just epic and I can't wait to see how you take it further. Also, I must tell you that you don't need to worry about the level of emotional stuff too much. You've kept it balanced and have made sure that the reader doesn't get bored with too much of it. Good job! =)

I hope my reviews helped you! Thank you for requesting this story and feel free to re-request when it's updated! I hope you like what I've said =) Keep it up! Until next time, good luck and Happy Writing! =D

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks! Gosh, I have no idea how to respond to that... so many compliments :D
I really wanted to put something in showing Bella in a more positive light, especially at this point, so when I thought about whether it should be her or Andromeda at the end of the memory I thought it should be her. Also, I haven't really shown much of Narcissa before and this was a good point to put her in a spotlight sorta-thing.
Ted, Remus and Tonks will turn up later as well, but I thought they needed to be in this chapter. Not just because she would be reminded of them every day, but also because the last funerals she would have gone to would have been theirs. It made sense, you know?
Haha, thank Merlin, lol! I'm really not an emotional person, so I never know how much is too much!
Your reviews definitely have helped!

Thank you so much for the wondeful reviews!
Aph xx


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