Hey, I'm back again!
Let's start with characterisation first. I think that the way you've created Andromeda is quite believable; she's not completely mourning any of her losses at the moment and that's totally understandable seeing as how she has to stay strong for the young Teddy she has with her. I like how she has started to deal with her grief slowly though. It's a good idea to bring it on slowly; makes the handling easier. Good job with her so far. And I really like how you make Teddy behave. It's just so cute and brings a smile on my face. =) Also, it's so adorable to know that Teddy and Victoire may already have something for each other. The entire concept is just... so cute, for lack of a better word. =P
I really liked how you brought Harry into the picture. It was really interesting and slightly amusing to see how Harry was nervous around her and it was just so like Harry that it again. made me smile. Hehe sorry but it seems like I'm smiling more than usual in this story which is supposed to be angst. =P Well, what can I do? It's just so perfect at times.
Moving on to the photo: I must say that that was genius idea! The vanishing of Bella is actually like a splash of cold water on your face. It makes her face the huge reality of losing a sister. I loved how you described her emotions when she saw the photo. Your description was impeccable and it seemed like I was Andromeda, worried about the photo-Bella, who had suddenly vanished from the picture. Excellent job!
About the end: I'm not entirely sure what the dream was all about. Some of the parts I could understand but some just did not make any sense. For instance, what was the meeting with Voldemort about? Is that all in her head or was it real and the memory has come back to haunt her? I suppose if you had written the dream in italics it would've been easier to distinguish between what's reality and what's in the dream.
Also, I noticed that in the second paragraph in the beginning, your tense wavered and for a couple of sentences you shifted from present to past. It's not a huge deal but I'm mentioning it because it disrupted my flow when I as reading it and I just thought that I should inform you. =)
I hope this review helps you. Great job with the story so far! =)
Author's Response: Andromeda's always seemed to me to be a very strong character, so that's how I write her. She will break down at some point, I think (don't quote me on that, though!), but she also, in a way, lost too much for her to completely comprehend it all now, you know?
Teddy and Victoire are so adorable! I love them to pieces (especially Teddy!). Admittedly, I loathe writing him because I have no idea how a small child is supposed to act and what he's supposed to be capable of doing at this point in his life, but... ah well :P
Hehe... Harry is a bit funny, isn't he? I remembered the bit in DH where he points his wand at her and that kinda influenced the way he acts around her.
The photo... it was a completely random idea, tbh, but it will definitely turn up again! Thanks for the compliments, too! :D
Yeah... I don't particularly like it, really. I just wanted to show that she's still scared, she's still recovering from the war and that she wonders, occasionally, what would have happened if she'd been a Death Eater kinda thing... it's all a dream and inside her own head. Hm... yeah, it could be clearer. I might edit it at some point... when my queue for the queue is not quite so long!
Ah, right, thanks! I tend to do that occasionally... Thanks for pointing it out!
Thanks for the lovely review - it was very helpful!