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Review:CambAngst says:
This just keeps getting better and better. Another really fantastic chapter!

First up, two nit-picky things:

1 - "I already know what it's going to be like with the Dursleys, and I know things can't be worst here." - I think you mean to say "worse here".

2 - "'I'm really touched by my father's actions,' Hugo beams" - This sounds very formal for a teenager.

Moving along, the discussion the next gen kids have about the Dursleys is really touching, especially Al and Lily. If I was going to suggest one thing, it would be to actually form the paragraph that starts with "Hugo's words" and ends with "the only real family he has" into actual dialog, either spoken or "inner dialog" for either Al or Lily. I think it would hit home even more that way.

"Mister Creevey's brother" This made me giggle and feel kind of sad at the same time. And the idea that there's now a history book dedicated to the second wizarding war is pretty cool!

I just can't get enough of this story! It's hard to force myself to stop and make notes for my reviews. But I will persevere!

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