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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! This is apocalypse, here with your review! =)

As there isn't much angst here in this chapter, I'm just going to focus on a few other things and go back to angst in the later chapters.

I think that overall this was a very nice prologue and the first word that comes to my mind is: sweet. It was a very sweet and cute chapter and the way the sisters interacted made it all the more great. The sisterly bonding is great and I can actually see what they meant to each other even at such a young age. I can see how all five of them were a very happy family and living a normal and peaceful life. The way you've written the parents' characters is actually quite interesting seeing they are so nice here and that fact makes their characters even better to read.

Moving on, I think the flow of you prologue and the memories it had was wonderful. I loved the memories altogether and the impact they has on me was big. It's pretty hard to write young children and I must say you've done a pretty good job if not an excellent one. It's convincing, yes and their characters are totally believable till now.

Bellatrix had a few characteristics of her adult self but on the whole she was nice and caring. I really can't wait to see if and how you show her transform into the Bellatrix the Death Eater. Readinf her character as child I already feel so sad knowing the fact that she's going to turn into a ruthless murderer. So for that sad feeling I have, I would like to congratulate you seeing as how you captured my interest here. =) Very good job!

Andromeda is the one who sounds exactly like her adult self. She's clearly the nicest of the lot and I really liked how, even at this age, you've maintained her childishness but have made sure that her character stands out as the one who's the least bit vulnerable to evil. She's innocent and it shows that she would, to some extent, remain innocent.

Narcissa's character is by far the most interesting. She's the youngest and so is the most vulnerable and sensitive and I could see that clearly. I wonder how she changed into the Narcissa we know from canon.

I think that's all I have to say at the moment. I really liked the beginning to what I know is going to be brilliant story!

Author's Response: Yeah, there's not that much in the prologue - it's a bit more of a comparison to later, looking back at it.
Thanks! I really wanted to avoid the whole 'Andromeda-was-a-blood-traitor-from-her-youth' and 'all-purebloods-are-treated-horribly-by-their-parents' stereotypes as there's no way they would both be true, you know?
Argh, writing young children is so hard! I know absolutely nothing about young children, so I was kinda making it up. I'm glad that it works, though, as I was pretty worried about it.
I wanted to make Bellatrix very definitely a child, and to avoid having her cursing things when young and things like that. Is it alright if I say I'm glad it made you sad, lol?
I'm going to be honest and say that I had no idea Andromeda stood out as the one least vulnerable to evil, lol. I did intend for her to be innocent, but also close to her sisters at the same time.
Narcissa is adorable. She will change over the course of the memories (I think. If all goes to plan), but at the moment she's sweet and cute. Very much the baby of the family :D

Aww, thanks so much!
Aph xx

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