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Review:CambAngst says:
This was a good chapter, and the ending was superb! I thought you got off to a bit of a rocky start. The first paragraph had some sentences in it that read awkwardly. But then you hit your stride and it was off to the proverbial races.

The recollections of Professor McGonagall were spot-on to what I remember thinking when I read Sorcerer's Stone, an intimidating presence but one that was always trying to teach, even when she was annoyed. One of my favorite things you're doing so far is contrasting Ron and Harry's impressions of various people with the way the Next Gen kids have grown up thinking about them. Scary, stern McGonagall vs. McGonagall the familiar family friend. (Alliteration unintentional, LOL). Over-sized, scary Hagrid vs. friendly, lovable Hagrid. It's such an interesting comparison.

And then the way you drew out Al and Lily's reactions to learning about the years their father spent with the Dursley's as well as Hugo's realization that his mother also had trouble making friends. That was wonderful! I hope to see a lot more of that kind of revelation as the story goes on.

This chapter was just terrific. I'm really enjoying this story!

Author's Response: After reading this review, I went back to see the beginning of the chapter and I can definitly see what you mean; this part has already been re-written and will be posted soon enough but thank you very much for pointing it out to me!

I'm glad you like how I present things because this is exactly what I wanted to. Ron and Harry are two different boys and, considering their past experiences, they see things very differently. Playing with perspectives was also a lot of fun and really gave an image to the message.

I'm very pleased that you liked Al and Lily's reactions, this really means a lot to me. I was afraid this part might be over or under done.

Thanks so much for this review, I'm really touched by your kind words!

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