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Review:Manga_girl says:
Hello, it's me again!

I am starting to really love reading this story! The idea is so cute and funny to see how the next generation kids react to their parents/aunties/uncles lives as a child. It is really sweet seeing Ron write letters to his mum and it just adds a certain effect to the story because you wrote the letters so well!

The flow of this is perfect and there is no part in the story that interrupts it. It goes along so smoothly and the reader knows exactly what is going on. It is all clearly worded as well!

I am starting to love your characterisations of all the characters (next gen and Hogwarts era). Ron, as a child, seems so funny and sweet in the way that you describe him! I just love it! Hermione is written well too, she seems so much like she does in the canon which is something I rarely see and cannot write myself! Harry is very good too.

The descriptions of your next gen characters are amazing, they work so well now and by every chapter, it gets better and better! Well done!

One tiny bit of constructive criticism. I think you use the word travellers a bit to much to describe the next generation kids. It is fine once or twice but it seems to appear a bit to much in this.

Despite this, I love your word choice. It works really well with the story and reflects the characters and plot so well! I cannot wait to see what happens next,

E x

Author's Response: Hi again!

I can't tell you enough how much I appreciate you telling me you like the letters! Finding Ron's voice was a bit tricky; I didn't want him to sound too childish or too mature so I'm glad you think I found the right touch.

Thanks for the critic; I definitly agree with this point and I'm working on this on the edit in order to correct this. Actually, when I re-read this chapter, I could not believe how many times I had used that word!!

Thanks again, I really appreciate this!


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