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Review:Houlestar says:
Teddy's got attitude! I like it. I haven't read many next-gen fics, but none of them that I've seen have portrayed Teddy like this, and I really like this Teddy a lot. I've never before thought about the pressure that would be placed on him, but now that you bring it up, I think Teddy would probably be pressured into being an auror regardless of his own wishes. He's got a lot of big shoes to fill.

Teddy's description of his relationship with Rose was lovely. It feels very natural (It corresponds to how I feel about my much younger cousins) so it really struck a chord with me, and I have to say bravo.

This story seems very interesting. I've always been a fan of detective/murder-mystery/crime/csi tv shows, so I like the magical twist this story has on a genre I know fairly well. There's definitely a lot of potential here for a very interesting story and I can't wait to see where it goes from here.

While I understand why you've done a lot of summarizing, (wanting to get the story going) I really don't like it much. I've always been a fan of show-don't-tell when it comes to writing. I think that the story would feel a lot smoother and more complete if you fleshed out the beginning and maybe didn't rush through it.

I've got one plot-pick. DNA. Wizards have never struck me as being very scientific (more medieval), so I find it really odd that DNA was being used in the wizarding world. it just doesn't go with the setting.

Overall this is a very interesting beginning and I am excited to continue reading it. (Sorry it took me so long to get to it with the Review exchange.)
-Houlestar

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