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Review:FreeYourDreams says:
Woah! Today I was browsing among stories and found this; I can't tell you how happy I am! Since I owe you 14 more reviews (I started reading and just couldn't stop!) this may be a little long.

First off, I love the idea for this story. It's so adorable that both Potter boys are madly in love and Al's character completely drew me in with his adorable blushing. I read the story thinking "I'll give it a shot" only to find myself immediately intrigued and pressing the next button.

Which reminds me to mention just how much I love your characters. I feel like you have spent a lot of time thinking about your characters and their personalities. In doing so, I feel like I really know the main people and I'm invested because you've made some memorable characters. I think that Al is just too sweet, but love that he does have a confidence that Camry hadn't seen yet. I also love that Cam, although indecisive about her feelings for Al, did realize that she does like hom in the end. Normally, the girls in these stories are so stubborn to admit their feelings that it creates a conflict between her and the romantic interest. However, making the conflict be the bet was very refreshing and I really sympathize with Cam now; I'm really hoping it works out for her.

Overall, your characters are very realatable and, more importantly in certain regards, extremely likeable. They all have their flaws and it's nice that not a single one is perfect. You've done an excellent job making sure we as readers continue to learn about your characters by adding small comments (like Al hates Herbology and the reason Cam hates flying). It's wonderful!

The flow and cohesion to this story is also something to mention. The story has progressed with an almost effortless ease to it; you've definitely made this a story that is easy to follow. I think part of the reason is you seem to focus on and capture the mood of your characters very well. I get excited when Cam's bouncing off the walls and disappointed with every one of Al's sad looks. Honestly, when reading the part where Cam races out of bed and cannot wait to ask Al out I found myself giddy with excitement. And my mood followed hers as I became more frustrated as her opportunities were ruined. You write very well and should be proud of the work you've done so far.

Overall, I think you've done an excellent job with this story so far and I am excited to see where you take it (I still can't believe I managed to jump into this story, completely unaware of the epic cliff-hanger awaiting me)! I really am a little disappointed that I haven't found this story sooner. Thank you for the beautiful piece of work that has significantly brightened my day!

Author's Response: I just came on for the first time in forever and saw this. It made me very happy, and I'm extremely flattered. I am now opening up my half finished chapter 16 because of this review.

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