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Review:emeraldeyes77 says:
I really enjoy this story :) It's a pretty original idea, at least I haven't read anything quite like it in my two and a half years on this site :) I really enjoy Olivia, I'm interested to see how things go with her mom.

Here's my advise: you need to start answering some questions. What is this evil force that is coming to power because Albus and Olivia aren't together? Why was Olivia hated after her and Albus broke up, he cheated on her. Why was Albus cheating on her in the first place if he loved her so much? And if he loved her as much as he did why didn't he try to win her back, or at least prove to her just how sorry he was for the pain he caused her. Why do Olivia and her mother not speak at all, what happened to her dad? Why is she so afraid of cars? The questions keep building and there are no answers being given. I'd say within the next few chapters at start heading down the road that will answer these questions, giving bits of information so we're not totally left in the dark. It'll help us make predictions about where the story is going as well as give a slightly clearer view of the plot, without giving to much away. Leaving to many questions and only adding more is making at least me, feel a little lost. I'm kinda feeling like I'm missing something vital.

But all in all like I said before I really like the story, I think Olivia is a perfect mix of snarky and cute. I love the conversations that Olivia has in her head with with her angel, they're very entertaining. And Anna makes me laugh :)

I hope you had a great holiday and Happy Birthday!

xoxo, Emm < 3

Author's Response: I really appreiciate all the points you brought up. I don't have a lot of time on here so, I'm going to try to make this short...but, i suck at that...

I cannot bring up the evil force because it will it will interfere with my plan for the story. I'm sorry if that dissapoints you. But, if you continue to read, you will find out! I'm not so much trying to make her sound hated by other people as much as I am by herself. I think hate may be the wrong word and I will try to clarify this in the next chapter. Why he cheated will be explained later. As will why he didn't fight for her.

I understand you point and why you feel left in the dark. And I will try to bring you answers soon. I just don't want to try to bring up all these things so soon because I feel like it will interfere with the direction I am trying to take this story. Because, and I don't know if this will make much sense to you but, I have a vision and sort of like a game plan that I would really like to stick to.

But, I am really pleased to see a review like this. I like that you are 'concerned'(?) with where this story is going because it tells me you are curious for more(maybe is the right way to put it). Thanks for the review. And thanks for the brthday wish! -Rowan.

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