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Review:Beeezie says:
Just a quick sidenote - you actually have "friendship" misspelled in the story summary.

So Teddy/Victoire is actually my OTP (along with James/Lily), so I wasn't sure how I would like this. However, the way you've written this, it felt so natural and real that I found myself going along with it despite that. I loved the scenario you came up with for why Louis missed the Hogwarts Express - it was exactly the sort of thing that was completely plausible and has happened to many, many people. (Including me. Not the Hogwarts Express, of course, but the train.)

I loved the interaction between him and Teddy. The two of them felt so real as they were talking. The conversation flowed effortlessly from one part to the next, and the way you gradually built up Louis admitting his feelings and getting out of the car was amazing. (I feel like it probably sounds like I am using a thesaurus, but I promise that I'm not! I'm just being repetitive because this was really, really well-written.)

My only negative comment is that at times, especially in the beginning, I found it difficult to tell which "he" you were referring to in a given sentence. That's going to be a little bit of a problem with two same-sex people interacting no matter what, but I wish it had been a tiny bit clearer.

I was curious about whether you'd gotten the win that, having read this, I was convinced you deserved, so I went and found the blog post. I'm very glad you did, because this was a terrific piece of writing.

Author's Response: Yes, I know. But I can't change it yet, because of the queue closure... LOL.

Teddy/Louis is my OTP, but I do love Teddy/Victoire too. I'm glad you still liked this, though. I'm like that all the time, so the scenario was just perfect. :P

They do feel so real and natural when they talk, that is why they are perfect for each other! Their relationship is effortless and perfect! ;)

Sometimes I doubt my writing, so thank you. I like the repetitiveness; positve comments definitely help me as much as CCs. :D

That's, like, the only think I need to work on; the right balance between "he" and their names. But I'm working on it. :)

Yes, I did. Thank you. I really didn't expect to win, but I'm glad you think this deserved to.

Sam.


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