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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's been such a long time since I've last read this story, but it's just as good as ever.

I found the change in Severus really interesting. Lily described him as a shell of what he once was, an apt description since war can have an insanely damaging effect on a person. Though I hadn't liked Narcissa much in this story (a side effect of having Lily be the narrator), I felt very sad and sympathetic for poor Severus. He had very little time with her before she was killed... And killed defending her husband. He must still feel very guilty about that. As well, I found Lily's sympathy for Severus very interesting. Even though she didn't like Narcissa, she was sorry that Severus had had to suffer through a loss such as that- it helped to bring out a softer, more human side to her and generate sympathy from the readers.

I also found Dumbledore's actions very interesting. I think that you did a good job characterizing him- he wouldn't be soft and happy with students who have disappointed. When he used his gift of knowing more things about a person than most would think possible to taunt Lily, I saw a side of Dumbledore very suited to war- he knows that lives are hanging in the balance and he can't afford to be overly kind. I still found it interesting that he would ask Lily to betray the names of her fellow Death Eaters as well as prospective ones because it's not the impression that I had of him in the books, but I do understand that it was a good way to gain an edge in the war as well as test Lily's willingness to change sides.

You're doing a great job of continuing the story in such a manner that doesn't feel either rushed or deathly slow. I look forward to reading the next chapter!

Author's Response: You're so sweet to have returned! :)

You said it well -- though my main focus was to generate sympathy for Severus and Lily, I do feel a twinge of pity for Narcissa. I tried to make her a parallel of James here in that she died defending the person she loved, showing a different side than the one we saw when she was a student and a bully. I think it mirrors her canon life as well, since her husband's affiliation negatively affected her and she obviously held a lot of love for her family. I did try to create multi-dimensional main characters here, and it seems like that worked for you, which is wonderful to hear.

You make a good point about Dumbledore, as I saw no sign of him demanding that Severus give him the names of other Death Eaters in canon so that he could systematically hunt them down. It's interesting to me how he interacts with whoever is in that role, be it Severus or Lily. It's a bit like a cat playing with a mouse, never taking too much but always taking a little bit for his own gain. However, as you said, these actions are necessary for Lily to gain his trust here.

To hear that the pacing is satisfactory for you allays a number of my fears. Thanks for another very kind review! :)

Amanda


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