I read your message on the previous chapter about dwindling feedback, and I thought "Hey!" (I like to say hello to myself in my head sometimes, keep myself company. But then-) I carried on thinking (something unusual for me) and I gots ta thinking, for someone who can write as incredibly as you, you deserve some feedbackalicious feedback, and voila, this review was born.
Still, I'm not going to go into too much detail (don't get your hopes up. Definately not a popcorn occasion but maybe time for a light snack, just to enhance the experience), because I'm not boring like some people would have you believe (malicious rumour spreaders! You know, I have some great anecdotes about being teased when I was younger, really meaty stories, but now's not the time- maybe when you accidentally bump into me at some event you're really looking forward to but I delay you with my looong, long, long stories... yeah, that would be a more appropriate time. I don't want to be inconvenient and get sidetracked in this great review I'm writing. For example, write a really extesive rambling essay and put it in brackets. That would be terrible!).
Lately I've notice a wee bit of character development you've got yeself there. Noticed? Who am I kidding, noticed? I'm swimming in it! Dancing in the joyous rain of character development! Already you had these incredible characters who are so very loveable (lovealbus I mean), but I keep getting surprised because this story keeps on improving. In these latest chapter there is a real sense of progression and I like that you mentioned in your author's note this chapter was the unofficial end of part one because it does feel like the characters have reached a certain point in the story. I loved them from the start but I really love the character development and I think things are being revealed at just the right pace and the same goes for the plot. Love all the Bea development in the last few chapters and especially Anjali in this one. And I just loved in this chapter the simple set up of the spiked flask and the nostril hair - it worked so well. Your writing seems to be so natural, you make it look easy, but then you pack in the comedy so well that I can't help but think you must work incredibly hard on it all or maybe it's just a combination of both. But in conclusion, there really is a strong sense of progression and you have every reason to be proud of this (emotionaltearwipe). It really does get better and better as massively cliché as I am being right now!
Plus, importantly, it's hillarious.
BAWW YOU ACTUALLY TRIED TO GIVE A FEEDBACKY REVIEW ♥ I can feel your effort. I love how quickly it descended into crack. I feel like this represents our friendship very well ♥
(also bracket stories are the best. I wish I could bracket entire one-shot detours into Capers, but that probably wouldn't be very wise)
Swimming? DROWNING! Ahem, okay fine, I'm being dramatic. But writing it does feel like drowning sometimes, lolol. (Lovealbus sounds a bit like something from the 70s and very non-12+) And asdghjk Helenaaa I lofff youuu have I told you recently? ♥ I'm always like lol where is my plot and now you have shown me my plots. And for that, I shall be eternally grateful.
Well, maybe for a month.