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Review:academica says:
Hi Susan!

Oh, I love that you took this chapter to explore Lily a bit! She's such an amusing character in this story, and I love her inner monologue about her looks and how they've been wasted on Albus when she could make much better use of them.

Speaking of Albus, you've done something interesting here. I don't read a lot of next-gen because it tends to be a bit cliche rampant, but I believe James is usually painted as being pretty and empty-headed, is he not? Interesting that you've transposed that onto Albus, the namesake of two Hogwarts headmasters. I like the bantering between him and Lily, and their interactions with Rose as well. Very entertaining.

Again, I also like your characterization of Ginny. Her matter-of-fact personality and tomboy nature is refreshing when juxtaposed with Lily's obsession with beauty and propriety.

Oh, my, what are we all in for? Your imagery did its work here, and I can see that Lily, Albus and Rose are about to enter a world bigger and brighter than anything they've seen. I'm very excited to see how the ball will go, and to see the return of the dastardly Scorpius Malfoy, as well as some of the other characters we are fond of from canon (perhaps).

Wonderful! :)


Author's Response: It's great to hear from you on this chapter, Amanda! Well, it's great for anything of mine that you review, but this chapter in particular was one I've been uncertain of, mostly due to the change in perspective, but also in the way that the alternate universe continues to develop. I'm really glad that you liked how Lily is turning out so far - she's a strange character because, for all her focus on appearances, she is a deliberate, careful thinker. Albus is much the same (though Lily will refuse to see it!) - I have an image of him as a secret spy, which is actually what I picture Harry doing during the French Revolution. XD This universe is getting way too complicated, that's for sure! But I love adding more and more details to it.

Yes, usually James is more of the silly one whereas Albus is either the brainy/nerdy one or the sensitive one (I don't read that many stories with them, but I think many writers take their inspiration directly from the Epilogue with its skeleton characterizations). In this story, Albus is the spoiled younger son who is very comfortable with his existence - a character more suited to that time period (there seems to be someone like him in most stories from that time). Yet, oddly enough, he gets along well with Rose. I still have to iron the creases out of his character. ;)

There will be more canons! Some of the cousins as well as others - the girls need dancing partners after all, and one knows that Scorpius will just refuse to dance. :P I hope that my inspiration for this story keeps up because it's a fun one to write. It's wonderful to see that it's just as fun for readers! :D Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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