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Review:The Christmas Fairy says:
Hi, Naida,

I really enjoyed the opening section to this chapter. I thought the discussion between Dippet and Slughorn was very well written, and I liked that you made Dippet suspicious. That rang true, as did Tom's explanation and natural charm.

I liked the Slytherin apparition very much, and I thought the description of Tom's racing heart matching his racing feet was lovely.

Then the section in the chamber of secrets was great too. It was pacy, exciting and well thought out. I really enjoyed the section with the basilisk, this was excellent.

I was puzzled why you ordered the chapter as you did though, putting the section in the chamber in flashback. I'm not sure this was necessary, but since you did choose to do it this way, I think the second section would have benefited from some lead-in to make it clear that we were going back in time. I was a little bit confused to start with.

In fact, I think reversing the order would make this chapter all the better, because the last line of the opening section was a perfect one to close.

But overall, I think this is definitely the best chapter so far. Great job.

Author's Response: Ahh, the order. You know, I might actually go back and change that, because even my beta was confused. When I wrote it, I wanted to be all clever and be like BAM! LETS SWITCH THE ORDER ON YOU! But it really is just confusing and strange, so I think I will end up switching it.

The section in the Chamber is possibly one of the most fun things I've ever written. I wrote it on a road trip, and with eight hours stuck with your family in a car, your mind tends to go to strange places :P I'm very glad you enjoyed it, though.

Thank you again!

-Naida


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