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Review:Roots in Water says:
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I enjoyed your interpretation of their lives after the war and Hogwarts. I definitely agree that they wouldn't be the same after living through a war- they would think differently and their minds (and bodies) would be forever altered. I think that you did a great job of showing this in very few words when you had Hermione (it was Hermione, wasn't it?) cut off her hair so that people could no longer compliment her on it. Simple, but very powerful.

Ron was very sweet and optimistic in this story- he did seem to be the type to be optimistic and hopeful about their future and it was very nice to see to see the effect he has on Hermione.

I would suggest that you change the "a red-haired boy" to "the red-haired boy" because from what the boy says it seemed like it was still Ron who spoke at that moment, but the "a" (and I'm being picky here) made it seem as though it was one of his brothers.

I think that you did a good job of keeping the characters nameless and the fact that they didn't have a name made the story all that more powerful because now their story is more universal (even though we know that it's Ron and Hermione).

A very small thing: with "where there last" it should be "were their last".

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this and I think that you did a great job with their characterization and of portraying such a powerful message in so few words.

Author's Response: Hey! *waves*
thank you, I love reading about stories Post-Hogwarts but there are never enough stories with people dealing about the aftermath.
Yes, it was Ron & Hermione, it was really obvious wasn't it? haha
Thanks for the advice, I'll change it as soon as the que opens again :D
Thank you! x


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