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Review:Roots in Water says:
I've never read a Tom/Minerva before but I've always been interested, so I'm glad that I read this.

I really enjoyed reading this. I think that you did a great job of portraying the hopelessness of the situation. I really felt for Minerva- she had expected him to still love her, but he had changed. In this story he acted like the Voldemort we know from the series, but it was interesting to see that in Minerva's memories it looked as though he loved her- or, at the very least, treasured her and treated her like a princess.

I liked the way you used the idea of running in this story. It really helped to give me an idea of Minerva at this point in her life- she's been scared of many things and so she ran- and now she can't go back, no matter how much she desires to do so, and so she has to keep on running. It's a very interesting idea that, at the end of the story, after she emptied her red box, she will still be running, even though she won't know why. I think that a lot of us are continually running from something, only we aren't quite aware of the fact that we are.

I did notice one or two small little typos as I was reading (feel free to ignore these corrections). In the phrase "his gaze not lingering from Minerva’s face", did you mean "not lingering on" or "lingering on"? I had a little trouble understanding it- I think that you mean that he couldn't stop looking at her? As well, "He eoched", it should be "echoed" and "started deep" should be "stared".

What I find the most interesting about this story is that at the end of it you can see the hints of her future character starting to shine through. She's stubborn with a hidden grief that will make her stronger.

All in all I really enjoyed this story and I think that I definitely will look up some more Tom/Minerva stories.

Author's Response: Tom/Minerva is defiantly an under loved ship in the shipping world.

Thank you! I tried to make this as realistic as possible and I'm glad that you think that I did a real job.

Woops, I'm terrible with typos. I'll fix them asap, thanks for pointing them out :) Check out Violet Gryffindor and Lilypotterfan123 for brilliant Tom/Minerva stories! They are the reasons that I started shipping them in the first place
Jaz, x

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