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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This is lovely, Amanda! I didn't expect you to write from James's perspective, but that perspective is what makes this perfect with its more limited point of view on Lily, their relationship, and the war - you dig more deeply into his complexities than a third person perspective is capable of, all of that emotion and confusion, his inner quarrels, particularly regarding his belief in the war. I liked that repetition because it emphasized how much Lily means to him and how afraid he is of losing her and losing what he has with her. His loyalties are pulling him in multiple directions, and he's not old enough to know how to deal with that - no one would be able to deal with it that much.

There's a lot that I could list of things I liked about this story. The Christmas dinner at her parents with their Muggle ways; the wedding seating plan with the joke about McGonagall (OMG! that made me laugh out loud); his worries over Snape (he's so paranoid - spending too much time with Moody, to be sure); and the portrayal of his love for Lily. You capture the L/J pairing wonderfully, and not only for a Snilly shipper - so often L/J stories are cliched and overdone, but this one has the perfect amount of fluff, well-tempered by the realities of the war. Excellent work, all-round! :D

I'm sorry for having taken so long to get to this, but I do hope that you're able to write more L/J if you can, as you've done a wonderful job with this and I'd love to see more! Your stories are fabulous, and anything new you write will be a treat! ^_^

Author's Response: Hey Susan! :)

People have said before that choosing to write through James was unexpected, but it just kind of made sense to me. I guess it's because of my perspective -- I'm so used to writing about Snape being so enamored with Lily, and so it just felt like a natural transition to write from James's view and describe his own adoration of Lily. I don't know if this is good, but she always seems to come across as this figure of light and pure goodness compared to the other characters I write.

I'm glad the McGonagall joke worked for you! People have praised the way I handled the Snape situation and James's feelings about being a young man in the midst of a war, but I don't think anyone has mentioned that, and it was my one reference to "classic" James. Anyway, I did want to make sure I treated the war appropriately, as you know how much it bugs me when people leave the war out of Marauder-era pieces. He's just a kid, and as you said, his loyalties are being pulled in so many directions, and he's being asked to become someone so much older and more mature than he should have to be.

As with most every time I've written something "new" for me, I've gotten a new appreciation for James out of this piece, and I don't think I'd be so vehemently opposed to writing him again in the future. Of course, I'll always wish my dear Severus had gotten the girl, but I can see a bit of the beauty in James/Lily now. I guess you never know :)

Thanks for your fantastic review! I love them.

Amanda


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