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Review:Chocolate_Frog says:
Hello, this is Chocolate_Frog from the forums with your requested review! :)

I haven't read many fics focusing solely on Teddy, but I have to say, I love your characterization of him! ♥ It's really different from how I usually see him portrayed, which is usually as the fit, perfect boyfriend (Victoire's POV), or the fit perfect boyfriend who's already taken (Rose's, or perhaps even Dom's). Having this in his POV makes it really different, and sweet: The way he treats his grandmother, his grief over his parents' deaths and his desire to prove himself... kind of reminds me of a sweeter, milder version of Harry. xD

This chapter does a great job of setting the scene. I'm interested in seeing how the dinner with the Potters will play out. Or, maybe, since this is a time travel story, the floo somehow messes up and he lands in the Potters' home in the Marauders era? And he gets to meet Remus and yay~ Or maybe... (Okay, now you have me guessing. That's never good; I may ramble on all night...)

Before my imagination runs away to elope with my brain, I have some CC for you. xD I found a few grammar mistakes in here, most of them having to do with the incorrect formatting of dialogue. For example, this sentence:

"Two years" He whispered to himself.

should actually be "Two years," he whispered to himself. Also, there are a few typos, like the extra 's' in this sentence:

Teddy spared a glance at the photo frame he kept beside his bed at all time s, inside was a picture of his parents.

I suggest a quick edit to fix up mistakes, or maybe even requesting for a Beta, as they can greatly improve the quality of fics. ^_^

Overall, a great chapter; and my interest is piqued. Feel free to re-request once the next chapter's up; I'd love to read more! ^^

~Chocolate_Frog

Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you so much! I haven't read any Teddy fics either but I had some help from some lovely friends of mine who had and they helped me shape him. I wanted to make him as realistic as possible.

Aha, you'll have to wait and see how the Potter's fit in but I hope you won't be too disappointed!

Also, thank you for pointing out those mistakes- I'd been rushing to get this chapter out and I missed a couple of things- I'll definitely be looking into a beta in the near future!

Thank you so much for the lovely review and I will definitely be back to re-request once my second chapter is up! Thanks again!

x Ely

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