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Review:Pixileanin says:
This was a very realistic confrontation between two people who have a lot to be angry about, but are so worn down by the world around them. Sirius has probably been waiting years to throw something at Lucy and this was definitely his chance to do that. Though you had me worried with the missing knife there at the beginning. I'm glad that was just a misdirect, or things might have gotten a bit messy. Whew!

You do a wonderful job with the small reveals of the backstory. Just enough to move it forward. Well done. And now I want to know why Lucy feels that her life has spiraled out of control. I mean, I know some, but I want her to explain it to me. And I'd also feel better if that knife showed up in the sink...

Author's Response: Oh, realistic! My favorite word to hear. Hooray. I've seen so many overdramatic fights in fanfiction that I really wanted to make this one seem like a realistic interaction between two ex-lovers who had fallen out rather heavily with one another.

You'll be hearing more from Lucy and not so much from the unnamed third-person narrator, don't worry. Particularly as the story winds to a close, she begins to fall apart a little more readily, having realized how difficult it is to attempt a normal life with the (first) man she left behind, and she'll be more willing to really tell Sirius how she feels.

Never fear, no stabbings to come! Though I don't think I remembered to properly resolve that little misdirect. Oops.

Thanks again!

Amanda


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