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Review:academica says:
Oh, Ron... I figured we hadn't seen the last of that little conflict. This moment added a brief bit of levity for me with the juxtaposition of Teddy's victory and Ron's defeat, despite the dark nature of Ron's problem, so that was interesting.

It's interesting that you've just now mentioned Harry. Although this story is about the Weasleys and their loss of Fred, obviously Harry is going to have some lasting carnage of his own. Your brief mention was very powerful, though.

"After the war none of them could deny the importance of family." I think that about sums up the piece. Very poignant.

The section about dinner was really heartbreaking, especially that final line. You have a powerful way of saying so much with only a few short paragraphs or a snippet of dialogue. You can tell that George really feels like an outsider without Fred.

I don't think I've mentioned this, but I like that you made Arthur the "narrator" of this story, the one whose perspective we see all the action from. You've really done well with making him this silent patriarch, the one who wants only the best for his wife and children and extended family, wanting to protect them and keep them as innocent as possible. It's very tender to read how he coped with the war's aftermath.

I think it can be hard to write based on pure emotion; I do some of the same work, and it can be annoying when you get a reviewer who prefers more action or romance. I really like this story and what you've done with such a difficult plot, so I think I'll try to remember to come back and finish reading and reviewing it when I have time. Excellent work! :)

Congrats again on winning the challenge!!

academica

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I hadn't even thought about the contrast between Ron's defeat and Teddy's victory until you mentioned it- it's interesting what comes out without the author intentionally meaning for that to happen.

I couldn't leave Harry out of the story because for me he's so intertwined with the Weasley family that he woud practically live there and, in doing so, interact quite often with the family and Arthur in particular. Because of this, I felt it necessary to include Harry's own reaction to the war, even if it wasn't the focus of the story.

I'm glad that you like that Arthur is the "narrator" of this story, the silent witness to his family's struggles. I received his name when I entered the "Depth of Character" challenge and this is the idea that sprung from it. I enjoyed writing from his perspective because he's older, more mature, and he acts as the "head" of the family. He is able to remember the first war, the way his family was before the start of the second war, and truly understand the changes that have occurred.

I do hope that you come back to finish reading this story- I enjoy reading your reviews because they're so helpful and in-depth. Thanks so much for the reviews!


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