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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Another excellent chapter! Not that I'm at all surprised, but I was really impressed by the way that you've carefully portrayed Elsa's slow recovery, both physically and, more importantly, mentally. She's dealing naturally with her trauma, which is something that's extremely hard to come by in any fiction, much less in fanfiction. Her anger, her frustration, her terror at being found again, they all drive home just how horrific her experience was - it explains why you chose to show most of the previous chapter from Damon's point of view: to show Elsa's would have been overwhelming, probably impossible to capture without making a spectacle of it. Her emotions are perfect here, as are those of Damon and everyone else - they're trying to play their parts, but there are too many cracks showing now because of what happened to Elsa.

I have to join Elsa in asking why Damon was able to escape unharmed while she was the one who was tortured. That mysterious man must have seen her as a weak point against which he could apply pressure, but it seems so strange that he wouldn't go after Gareth himself. I'm really curious about that man and what role he's going to play, both in this story and in the events of the First War.

There was again a typo that I noticed - "tell" as "tlel" - but otherwise, I admire your writing skills for this chapter. This story has lots of depth to it and a wonderful cast of characters along with nice little details such as the undying flowers - it's those kind of things that really push a story into the next level of greatness. :D

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