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Review:Pixileanin says:
Oh, I have been meaning to review this for ages and ages. These two characters are so messy, so torn. I'm sure you have big plans for them.

"No, I'm Sirius. He needed to remember that. He refused to let himself forget who he was."

This line was so well-placed, and a great twist on the usual way it is thrown around in fanfiction. I felt the punch of it full on.

"I never sleep well, she almost reminded the woman."

You give me a taste of this woman, and I already feel that she has some inner struggles that are going to come out. I really enjoy when an author is able to use so few words to give such a clear picture of the characters. I love getting into your characters and the depth you create for them. It's something you do so well and it is a pleasure to read.

Please forgive the lateness of this review. You have some great stuff going on in here!

pix

Author's Response: I think I have a problem writing characters without serious issues. It's good in a way because it makes it more difficult to fall into the Mary Sue trap, but I do put some of them through the wringer before I'm done with them.

That "No, I'm Sirius" line is one of my favorites, and others have remarked that they liked it, too. I'm glad you liked the twist!

Don't worry about the delay! I'm flattered that you stopped by to check this out, and I hope you enjoy getting to know my rather tortured characters.

Thanks for the kind review! :)

academica


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