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Review:MidnightBlue_x says:
Hey There, This is ElysiumJayne from the forums with the reviews you requested back in September! I'm sorry that I took so long to get these reviews to you but real life had been super busy. Anyway, on to the review!

Your first paragraph drew me in straight away and while it was short and simple, it was also lovely. I loved the conversation between Lily and her father, you really captured the essence of what I imagined their relationship to be like and so quickly too! That being said, I love how you bought Petunia into it as well. The line "In June you'll finally be able to come to Hogwarts to see me gradu-" was super amazing, I haven't read many Lily/James fics where people have actually mentioned that Petunia had once wanted to be in Lily's shoes, therefore yours gained extra points! It was also wonderful that you gave a sort of comparison between Lily's family and Severus's, I thought that was a great little part!

I immediately adored the way you wrote the Marauders and I was so glad that James wasn't an arrogant jerk who only mentioned Lily straight away- it was a nice change to some of the fics around at the moment. I was so glad when James didn't change the moment you mentioned Lily either, I think you are great at writing the more mature version of James. All in all, I love your characterisation of pretty much every character you've introduced so far- even Severus, and honestly, I'm not his biggest fan.

You always asked about flow- to put it quickly, I think your flow was perfect- everything worked pretty much excellently. I personally think it makes perfect sense, it's very well written and like I mentioned your characterisation is too die for. The last thing, you asked was whether it was enjoyable- well I surely enjoyed reading and reviewing it for you!

With that, I shall see you in the next chapter.

x Ely

Author's Response: I know what it's like to get busy, so no worries. You got around to it eventually, and that's what counts.

I'm glad you appreciated the moments with Lily's family, especially Petunia. She's a really interesting character, albeit unpleasant. I think the dynamic between the two sisters (and Snape) is a very fertile ground for stories.

There had to be a lot more to James than his crush on Lily. I don't think that he'd spend every waking moment talking about her.

Flow's always a big concern for me, so I'm really glad that it all worked and that the characterization came across well.

I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the nice review!
-Houlestar


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