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Review:Everlasting Faerie Light says:
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This is a very nice holiday read. The scene presented in the story is a very realistic image of a Christmas present opening for the Marauders (with the exception of James). I love the fact that you manage to keep it innocent, yet fairly humorous. Marauder stories always usually end up fairly promiscuous or overboard rebellious (not that I have a problem with that hehehe), but you managed to capture the marauders in a particular situation in a very canonical way. I love the little quirky narratives about Sirius's eggnog at the beginning and end, as well as Remus's reaction to his argyle socks. It adds to the overall light tone of the story. The dialogue is well done and the overall flow of the story is pretty good. My personal favorite quote in this story is

"...holding up his hands as though warding away the bubonic plague."

I absolutely love it because it's a clever usage of simile and it's something that I, personally, would write in my stories.

There were a few awkward sentences and typos, particularly in the beginning of the story, but nothing that would detract from the contents of the story. All in all, this is a short and sweet piece that is perfect for the holidays. Well done.

-Everlasting Faerie Light

Author's Response: Thanks for being willing to review this! I'm glad you enjoyed it -- I have a different view of the Marauders from most people on this site, it seems, but rebellion and promiscuity were never rampant among them. :P

If you could point out some of those awkward sentences or typos, I'd be obliged! I read back through the story and didn't really see anything, but of course, I have author's bias. :) Thanks again for the review!


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