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Review:Secret Santa :) says:
Another great chapter! I like where this is heading so far :) Your writing works really well with the narration of the story!

I loved the idea of 'two twin witch children born to muggles' - I've actually never, ever read or heard about this before! You have some really creative ideas! And I just love Marlene's random insults - "You are such a vegetable!" made me laugh!

I liked how you started developing Mary's character, especially tying it in with Marcia and the Slytherins - I thought that was pretty clever.

Oh, Marlene and Regulus used to be in a relationship? That's unexpected! And I find it intriguing that Lily is the only one who knows about it. I hope we get to find out more of it in the story? It's always good to develop deeper backstories to the characters so we get to know them more! I get why Marlene ran, but where did Lily go after that? I thought it'd be nice to mention that Lily followed after her?

Also, when you talked about Regulus, you said.. "Until he became a Death Eater" was that just something to make the story more plausible? because in canon, did that happen later, or was it actually during the marauders' sixth year? (i haven't got internet to search it right now, so i'm interested to find out why).

Overall, another lovely chapter! :)

♥ secret santa

Author's Response: Hey!

I got a review on every chapter!! *squee*

This one is where the angst and plot tension really starts to snowball, so I'm pleased you think I captured it well. I really don't know how I thought about Marcia and Mary being twin-witch-muggleborns, but I think I had created an OC who had a twin sister who turned bad. I gave the twin sister to Mary, before remembering she was muggleborn. Then I shrugged and still placed her with Mary! So I guess it wasn't intentional...not really! :)

The Marlene/Regulus is kind of going to be a BIG backstory and worm through the main plot too! I love the ship. I don't want Lily to follow, because I wanted the last bit of the chapter to be quite emotionally charged and focused solely on the interaction between Marlene and Regulus really.

Hmm...to be honest I didn't check when Regulus becomes a Death Eater! *blush!* I know this was starting out canon, but I'm pretty sure we don't find out when he joins up. And this is just how it works with my plot.

THANK YOU! :)


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